autobiography final

Family background

My name is Janice, and I was born in an ordinary but wonderful family in Tainan. There are five members in my family. My father is an electronic engineer, and he is very humorous. He has taught me a lot of methods about how to get along with others, and it helps me a lot. My father also teaches me that never give up easily and I can learn many things from my experience. My mother is the greatest person in my whole life. When my brother, sister, and I were children, my mom quit her job and took care of us carefully. When we were elementary school students, she helped us on our studies. And she always teaches us to be more patient to everything we encounter even though it is very difficult. My younger brother and sister are harmonious with me. When they have any questions, they always turn to me for help and I will share my experience to them. Having these nice and perfect families makes me feel very happy and pleasant.

School life

I am studying at Department of Applied Foreign Language in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I am very happy to study in such good class because my classmates are friendly and live with harmony. By learning together we always share our experience to each other. When we have any question on studies, we will try to help each other to solve it. Therefore, they become the motive which encourages me to keep learning with enthusiasm.

At school, I have served many different kinds of cadres. When I was the freshman, I was voted to be discipline. By acting as a discipline, I have learned a lot about how to communicate with my classmates by the most efficient way but not to hurt our affections. For example, when they are so noisy that I can’t stop them, I wouldn’t shout at them but tell them that it’s my fault which made them have such noisy environment to study. Surprisingly, they no longer harass me again. Because of this successful experience, I know that there are many ways to solve problems, so do not give up easily.

In addition to academic studies, I also attended some contests. One of the contests which impressed a lot is English storytelling contest. I attended this contest with two of my classmates. During the contest, we encountered many difficulties but we always kept positive attitude and solved the problems together. At that time, we had to change clothes on the stage within very short time, so we tried many ways to make the performance fluently together. Finally, we did it and won the first prize.

Being English major, I have to study English every day. Apart from studying textbook, I also study English magazines and when I have free time, I like to listen to English songs, read English newspapers, watch movies in English and so on. By doing so, I have made a great progress on my reading and listening abilities. With my parents’ and teachers’ encouragement, I took the General English Proficiency Test and passed the intermediate level. I was so happy that I realized why everyone said that effort leads to success. I think I will keep making effort to make myself learn more things about English and become expert in English.

Self-Evaluation

I think that I am an enthusiastic and thoughtful girl. I like to attend activities which are attractive to me, for example, drama club, guitar club, English storytelling contest, and so on. By joining these interesting activities, I find my interest and realize myself about what my professional skills are. After I enter the drama club, I find that there is a paradise for me because I can express my real feeling by acting and I don’t have to be afraid that I will be made fun of. Trained by the teacher in the drama club, I find myself is good at acting in a play. I can properly express the feeling and the mood of role. Every time after I finish a play and hear the claps from the audience, I feel content and moved, so I like to perform. Besides, I also consider myself as a good learner and I have many advantages. I can communicate with foreigners naturally and I am able to have a speech in English with eloquence, so I always get a high score in my class. In addition, I can be aware of others emotions sensitively, and when my friends need, I will give them a hand and share some experience of mine with them.

When it comes to my attitude to life, I am considered an optimistic person because I always look on the bright side when I encounter some difficulties. Moreover, I always tell myself that I should do my best to reach my goal and keep believe in myself that I can make it. I hope this attitude will help me to make my dream come true in the future.

Future perspectives

If I could enter this college, I hope that I could have more obvious progress in my English. I hope I will be able to communicate with foreigners with confidence. Also, I plan that I have to pass the advanced level of GEPT within the four years in college, which means I have a certain degree in English. In addition, I think I will do my best to get the chance to go abroad. By doing so, I can contact more foreign cultures and understand the differences among countries. Maybe one day I will become a diplomatist who helps our government to deal with important things in international. This is the dream that I have made since I was a little child and I consider it a job of glory which makes me feel proud of. Sincerely, I hope I can make my dream come true by the training in this college.

After you review my autobiography, I hope you can give me a chance to enter your school. I will do my best to learn more abilities in the four years in the future. And may one day I will be a successful person.

Future perspectives--revised

If I could enter this college, I hope that I could have more obvious progress in my English. I hope I will be able to communicate with foreigners with confidence. Also, I plan that I have to pass the advanced level of GEPT within the four years in college, which means I have a certain degree in English. In addition, I think I will do my best to get the chance to go abroad. By doing so, I can contact more foreign cultures and understand the differences among countries. Maybe one day I will become a diplomatist who helps our government to deal with important things in international. This is the dream that I have made since I was a little child and I consider it a job of glory which makes me feel proud of. Sincerely, I hope I can make my dream come true by the training in this college.

Self-Evaluation--revised

I think that I am an enthusiastic and thoughtful girl. I like to attend activities which are attractive to me, for example, drama club, guitar club, English storytelling contest, and so on. By joining these interesting activities, I find my interest and realize myself about what my professional skills are. After I enter the drama club, I find that there is a paradise for me because I can express my real feeling by acting and I don’t have to be afraid that I will be made fun of. Trained by the teacher in the drama club, I find myself is good at acting in a play. I can properly express the feeling and the mood of role. Every time after I finish a play and hear the claps from the audience, I feel content and moved, so I like to perform. Besides, I also consider myself as a good learner and I have many advantages. I can communicate with foreigners naturally and I am able to have a speech in English with eloquence, so I always get a high score in my class. In addition, I can be aware of others emotions sensitively, and when my friends need, I will give them a hand and share some experience of mine with them.

When it comes to my attitude to life, I am considered an optimistic person because I always look on the bright side when I encounter some difficulties. Moreover, I always tell myself that I should do my best to reach my goal and keep believe in myself that I can make it. I hope this attitude will help me to make my dream come true in the future.

Future Perspectives

If I could enter this college, I hope that I could have more obvious progress in my English. I hope I will be able to communicate with foreigners with confidence. Also, I plan that I have to pass the advanced level of GEPT within the four years in college, which means I have a certain degree in English. In addition, I think I will do my best to get the chance to go abroad. By doing so, I can contact more foreign cultures and understand the differences among countries. Maybe one day I will become a diplomatist who helps our government to deal with important things in international. This is the dream that I have made since I was a little child and I consider it a job of glory which makes me feel proud of. Sincerely, I hope I can make my dream come true by the training in this college.

Self-Evaluation

I think that I am an enthusiastic and thoughtful girl. I like to attend activities which are attractive to me, for example, drama club, guitar club, English storytelling contest, and so on. By joining these interesting activities, I find my interest and realize myself about what my professional skills are. After I enter the drama club, I find that there is a paradise for me because I can express my real feeling by acting and I don’t have afraid that I will be made fun of. Trained by the teacher in the drama club, I find myself is good at acting in a play. I can properly express the feeling and the mood of role. Every time after I finish a play and hear the claps from the audience, I feel content and moved, so I like to perform. Besides, I also consider myself as a good learner and I have many advantages. I can communicate with foreigners naturally and I am able to have a speech in English with eloquence, so I always get a high score in my class. In addition, I can be aware of others emotions sensitively, and when my friends need, I will give them a hand and share some experience of mine with them.

When it comes to my attitude to life, I am considered an optimistic person because I always look on the bright side when I encounter some difficulties. Moreover, I always tell myself that I should do my best to reach my goal and keep believe in myself that I can make it. I hope this attitude will help me to make my dream come true in the future.

School Life--revised

I am studying at Department of Applied Foreign Language in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I am very happy to study in such good class because my classmates are friendly and live with harmony. By learning together we always share our experience to each other. When we have any question on studies, we will try to help each other to solve it. Therefore, they become the motive which encourages me to keep learning with enthusiasm.

At school, I have served many different kinds of cadres. When I was the freshman, I was voted to be discipline. By acting as a discipline, I have learned a lot about how to communicate with my classmates by the most efficient way but not to hurt our affections. For example, when they are so noisy that I can’t stop them, I wouldn’t shout at them but tell them that it’s my fault which made them have such noisy environment to study. Surprisingly, they no longer harass me again. Because of this successful experience, I know that there are many ways to solve problems, so do not give up easily.

In addition to academic studies, I also attended some contests. One of the contests which impressed a lot is English storytelling contest. I attended this contest with two of my classmates. During the contest, we encountered many difficulties but we always kept positive attitude and solved the problems together. At that time, we had to change clothes on the stage within very short time, so we tried many ways to make the performance fluently together. Finally, we did it and won the first prize.

Being English major, I have to study English every day. Apart from studying textbook, I also study English magazines and when I have free time, I like to listen to English songs, read English newspapers, watch movies in English and so on. By doing so, I have made a great progress on my reading and listening abilities. With my parents’ and teachers’ encouragement, I took the General English Proficiency Test and passed the intermediate level. I was so happy that I realized why everyone said that effort leads to success. I think I will keep making effort to make myself learn more things about English and become expert in English.

Family Background--revised

My name is Janice, and I was born in an ordinary but wonderful family in Tainan. There are five members in my family. My father is an electronic engineer, and he is very humorous. He has taught me a lot of methods about how to get along with others, and it helps me a lot. My father also teaches me that never give up easily and I can learn many things from my experience. My mother is the greatest person in my whole life. When my brother, sister, and I were children, my mom quit her job and took care of us carefully. When we were elementary school students, she helped us on our studies. And she always teaches us to be more patient to everything we encounter even though it is very difficult. My younger brother and sister are harmonious with me. When they have any questions, they always turn to me for help and I will share my experience to them. Having these nice and perfect families makes me feel very happy and pleasant.

School Life

I am studying at Department of Applied Foreign Language in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I am very happy to study in such good class because my classmates are friendly and live with harmony. By learning together we always share our experience to each other. When we have any question on studies, we will try to help each other to solve it. Therefore, they become the motive which encourages me to keep learning with enthusiasm.

At school, I have served many different kinds of cadres. When I was the freshman, I was voted to be discipline. By acting as a discipline, I have learned a lot about how to communicate with my classmates by the most efficient way but not to hurt our affections. For example, when they are so noisy that I can’t stop them, I wouldn’t shout at them but tell them that it’s my fault which made them have such noisy environment to study. Surprisingly, they no longer harass me again. Because of this successful experience, I know that there are many ways to solve problems, so do not give up easily.

In addition to academic studies, I also attended some contests. One of the contests which impressed a lot is English storytelling contest. I attended this contest with two of my classmates. During the contest, we encountered many difficulties but we always kept positive attitude and solved the problems together. At that time, we had to changes clothes on the stage within very short time, so we tried many ways to make the performance fluently together. Finally, we did it and won the first prize.

Being English major, I have to study English every day. Apart from studying textbook, I also study English magazines and when I have free time, I like to listen to English songs, read English newspaper, watch movies in English and so on. By doing so, I have made a great progress on my reading and listening abilities. With my parents’ and teachers’ encouragement, I took the General English Proficiency Test and passed the intermediate level. I was so happy that I realized why everyone said that effort leads to success. I think I will keep making effort to make myself learn more things about English and become expert in English.

Family Background

My name is Janice, and I was born in an ordinary but wonderful family in Tainan. There are five members in my family. My father is an electronic engineer, and he is very humorous. He has taught me a lot of methods about hoe to get along with others, and it helps me a lot. My father also teaches me that never give up easily and I can learn many things from my experience. My mother is the greatest person in my whole life. When my brother, sister, and I were children, my mom quit her job and took care of us carefully. When we were elementary school student, she helped us on our studies. And she always teaches us to be more patient to everything we encounter even though it is very difficult. My younger brother and sister are harmonious with me. When they have any questions, they always turn to me for help and I will share my experience to them. Having these nice and perfect families makes me feel very happy and pleasant.

autobiography-sample two

My name is Fang. I am now 17 years old. I have an English name called Matthew. I am studying in a private high school. There are five people in my family officer and my mother is a housewife. Both of my younger brother and sister are studying in junior high school. You might think that my family is a traditional and stern one because of my father. However, it’s the opposite. My father is an open-minded person full of sense of humor. I must say I am lucky to have such a happy family.

My father certainly have great influence on me, I always look up to him. His passion and dedication to his job and family are the best things us. He never forces us to do anything we don’t like. He gives us freedom of choice. That’s why I can join so many school activities and have the chance to develop my hobbies.

I have been very active. I am one of the computer freaks who just can’t take my eyes away from the computer screen. My friends know I am good in computer, so as their computers have troubles, they would come to me. I am also a picture in school baseball team. Our team has won many, many matches thus we gained an honorable title of ”unbeatable” team “I believe this is resulted from our constant practice, hard work and our strong team spirit.

Although computer and baseball take up most of my leisure time, I manage to use some spare time to play electronic guitar in a band. I use computer to make a lot of our songs into MIDI flies and send them forward to many friends. My friends love them and think it’s awesome. To be able to combine my knowledge of computer and music is my proudest thing. Don’t get me wrong. I didn’t neglect my study. Unless my grades in school is OK, otherwise my parents won’t let me go all these.
I have been interested in computer since I was an elementary school student. That was the time Father had this big computer on his desk. Every time I was father’s absorbed face while using the computer, I developed this kind of admiration to it. I said to myself “I want to be like that one day.”

I liked to play around with my dad’s computer. One day I accidentally deleted one of my dad’s important files, I was very scared that my father would be furious with me. However it was not the case, my father gave me a gift instead of punishment. I was so surprised. Guess what? Yes, I got anew computer. Ever since then I have been addicted to computers, especially after the emerging of the Internet. Surfing the net has been one of my greatest hobbies.

The e-Commerce has changed our traditional form of life style. Take myself for example: I keep in touch with my friends through e-mail: I send my greetings through e-card; I buy books from e-book; I shop from many websites and I search information from the search engines.
Not to mention the importance of the e-era has brought most powerful reform to the business world banks and stock markets do transaction through the net, business direct transaction through the net, he space and time limitation no longer exist. I am fascinated to the new change and eager to take part in it. So I have decided to study in Computer and Information Science. I want to be a professional computer programmer who creates and designs the software to meet the needs of people in e-ear.

autobiography-sample one

I am Lin. Sophia is my English name. I am 18 years old, studying in a public girls’ high school. I come from a very happy middle class family. My father works in a bank and my mother works in a bookstore. I am not the so-called spoiled child. My parents make very sure of that by training me to be independent.

Throughout my academic career I have not only gotten good grades but also been very active on sport field and have involved in various societies. I play volleyball and enjoy the team spirit we have. I have joined the drama club and participated in many English speech contests. I really enjoy participating in school activities. I not only made many friends, but also gained many different valuable experiences.

I have been the class English tutor for almost three years. I like to discuss and share the experience of learning English with people a lot. We often read “China Post” and ”Time Magazine” and discuss the content, the word usage and practice speaking English by discussing the articles we have read. At the beginning we found it was quiet hard because we could rarely understand the content but we encouraged each other not to give up. Gradually we had made improvement, we were so excited by it that the group discussion of English books and magazines became one of the most enjoyable things for us every week. I have won the first prize of school English speech contest in second year of high school and many of my English speech contests in my second year of high school and many of my English articles were put on “Students Post.”

My fondness for English is developed from my childhood. It’s lonely to be the only child. I had no one to play with when I was a kid. My mom knew this so she took me with her all the time. Hence bookstores became my playground and books have been my playmates since I was young. My mom would show me those fancy books with cute illustrations on it. Firstly I was drawn by the pictures and then I was curious about these strange symbols called words. That was my first contact with English. As I was interested what those symbol meant, my parents taught me a bit. As they felt that I was eager to learn, they found me an English tutor. Thanks to my parents got the advantage of learning English by starting it at really early age.

My interest in English brought me to the world of English literature. I have been enchanted by this creative world since then, so I decide to major in English literature. My aim is to explore the world of literature and the world of great writers, to open my eyes and cultivate my mind through this great world of literature.

Besides English literature, I also have a wide range of hobbies. I love reading, Writing, music and movies. I have my active side as well, I enjoy swimming, hiking, raveling and going to the nature a lot. I believe we must have balance in our lives, As to my personality. I am creative, optimistic, determined, willing to help others and down to earth.
I want to be one of the literature students who have the privilege of studying great writers’ work and exploring their inner world, their outlook of life and their role as learned scholars and their influence on the world. I can also do little contribution to awaking the awareness of culture and literature in our society since its importance has been neglected by us.

Best of the semester--3

Using nuclear power to solve the energy crisis is a popular way in many countries. Although many people think that it is a good idea, I strongly believe that there are many disadvantages of using nuclear power. First, it might pollute the environment around us, and some creatures might be extinct. We have only one earth, so we have to do our best to protect it. Second, nuclear power is dangerous that it might cause radiation leak if we use it carelessly. Once the radiation leaks, we might face many thorny situations.  Finally, it is harmful to our health because it might result in pathological changes of our bodies. What's worse, it might take people's lives away. According to these reasons above, I don’t agree to use nuclear power to solve the energy crisis.

Best of the semester--2

I like to watch movies, and one of my favorites is Twilight. It is a story about vampire's love. A human girl fell in love with a vampire who had lived in the world for one hundred and nine years but still had a young handsome appearance. It was not allowed to have a love affair between a human and a vampire because they had to prevent human from knowing the existence of vampires. Unfortunately, the human girl was pregnant at this time, and she wanted to give birth to her baby who was a half human and half vampire. However, the baby was too strong for the girl to endure the pain. When the baby was born, the girl almost died, so the vampire bit her and made her become a vampire like him so that they could be together forever. It is the most romantic movie that I have ever seen.

Best of the semester--1

There are a great variety of holidays within a year. Among them, Chinese New Year is my favorite. First, I can have a big dinner with my family and we usually feel happy and laugh a lot when we share something interesting happened around us. Also, we children can get red envelopes with much money inside from our parents and grandparents. I often save the money in the bank to prevent a rainy day. Finally, we always go on a trip during this long holiday and have a lot of fun. After the trip, I often feel that I am full of energy to face the challenges in the next year. Chinese New Year always brings me a perfect memory.

Discussing effects--1--revised

After I graduated from senior high school, I decided to go to an English-speaking country. There are some reasons why I make this decision. First, living in an English-speaking country can help me improve my oral ability so that I can talk with others in English fluently. Second, I’d like to know the cultures between an English-speaking country and my hometown. This makes me not offend people whose cultures are different from mine. Third, there is much welfare for students in an English-speaking country, such as America, so that I can have many learning resources. According to those reasons, I have a strong desire to explore an English-speaking country.

Discussing effects--2--revised

A new factory in Acton may bring some positive effects to this small town. There are some benefits I think it would bring to this town. First, it may offer more jobs to the residents. Therefore, they can earn much more money and the young persons don’t need to leave their hometown to find jobs. Second, it may cause economic prosperity to the town and lead Acton to success. Third, this may bring many tourists in Acton, and Acton may become a famous site that everyone knows. Because of these reasons, I consider that Action may have a wonderful future if the factory opens.

Discussing causes--2--revised

According to the case, there were several reasons why Mr. Williams closed his music store. First, he offered only two kinds of music, hip-hop and rock, but the residents in the region were almost elders who didn’t like that kind of music. Second, the opening period of the shop was too short and people who were interested in hip-hop and rock music were mostly teenagers, but they were at school while the shop was opening. Third, the shop accepted cash only, but most of the students didn’t own credit cards but cash. These reasons led to the failure of this shop.

Discussing causes--1--revised

There are some reasons that influence me to get married. First, I love my boyfriend very much, so I want to accompany him forever, spending the inevitable course of my lifetime. Second, I’d like to have a family of my own which is warm and nice. After a tiring day, I can come back to my comfortable home and relax myself. Third, I want to have my own children with my lover. And my children will take care of my husband and me when we become old. According to these reasons, I want to organize a family and live a happy life.

Expressing an opinion--2--revised

Meeting people through online dating sites becomes more and more popular in this E generation. It is often argued that making friends through the online dating sites sometimes is dangerous. However, I think that meeting people through these sites has many advantages. First, it is really interesting to chat with people from different families, or even countries, on these sites. I can learn more differences between different cultures. Second, it is making friends on the sites that are really exciting for me. Sometimes I can know some famous people through the sites. Finally, I can also learn some new information from those people which makes me broaden my knowledge. To sum up, it is a good idea to meet people through online dating sites.

Expressing an opinion--1--revised

Using nuclear power to solve the energy crisis is a popular way in many countries. Although many people think that it is a good idea, I strongly believe that there are many disadvantages of using nuclear power. First, it might pollute the environment around us, and some creatures might be extinct. We have only one earth, so we have to do our best to protect it. Second, nuclear power is dangerous that it might cause radiation leak if we use it carelessly. Once the radiation leaks, we might face many thorny situations.  Finally, it is harmful to our health because it might result in pathological changes of our bodies. What's worse, it might take people's lives away. According to these reasons above, I don’t agree to use nuclear power to solve the energy crisis.

Discussing effects--2

A new factory in Action may bring some positive effects to this small town. First, it may offer more jobs to the residents. They can earn much more money. Second, it may cause economic prosperity to the town and lead Action to success. Third, this may bring many tourists in Action, and Action may become a famous site that everyone knows it. Because of these reasons, I consider that Action may have a wonderful future.

Discussing effects--1

After I graduate from senior high school, I decide to go to an English-speaking country. There are some reasons that I do this decision. First, living in an English-speaking country can help me improve my oral ability so that I can talk with others in English fluently. Second, I’d like to know the cultures between an English-speaking country and my hometown. This makes me not to offend people whose cultures are different from mine. Third, there is much welfare for students in an English-speaking country, such as America, so that I can have many learning resources. According to those reasons, I have a strong desire to explore an English-speaking country.

Contrasting--2--revised

I am the principal of this school and now I am going to hire a new instructor for my school. There are two resumes from Lynn Whitnall and Debra Fines who are applying for the job, so I have to compare them and make a decision. First, Debra has more education than Lynn. Although Debra has more employment experience than Lynn, Lynn masters more languages than Debra. In addition, Lynn has won an award while Debra hasn't. After considering, I decide to hire Lynn Whitnall who I think is more suitable for this position.

Contrasting--1--revised

I am a freshman in the college, so I have to find a house where I can live comfortably on my own. Now, I have found two houses which might be suitable for me, but I have to make a decision. One of them is in Fairfax which has two large bedrooms, and the other one is CAMPUS APRTS which has only one bedroom. The former provides air conditioner, while the latter is near campus. And the first one is furnished, but the second one isn't. Though the first one offers more equipments than the second one, its price is higher. Also, I have a pet dog, Gigi, so, I think I would choose the CAMPUS APTS which is more suitable for me.

Comparing--3--revised

They are two similar teachers I know in our school. One is Lily, and the other one is Vicky. Both of them teach English, and they are both working hard. They have the same constellation, Sagittarius, so they have similar personalities. Both of them like to help those who are in need. Also, they are graceful and kind to everyone. It's really uncommon to see that two persons from different families are so similar.

Discussing cause--2

According to the case, there were several reasons why Mr. Williams closed his music store. First, he offered only two kinds of music, hip-hop and rock, but the residents in the region were almost elders who didn’t like that kind of music. Second, the opening period of the shop was too short and people who were interested in hip-hop and rock music were mostly teenagers, but they were at school while the shop was opening. Third, the shop accepted credit cards only, but most of the students didn’t own credit cards but cash. These reasons led to the failure of this shop.

Discussing cause--1

There are some reasons that influence me to get married. First, I love my boyfriend very much, so I want to company with him forever, spending the inevitable course of my lifetime. Second, I’d like to have a family of my own which is warm and nice. After a tiring day, I can come back my comfortable home and relax myself. Third, I want to have my own children with my lover. And my children will take care of my husband and me when we get old. According to these reasons, I want to organize a family and live a happy life.

Expressing an Opinion--2

Meeting people through online dating sites becomes more and more popular in this E generation. It is often argued that making friends by the online dating sites sometimes is dangerous. However, I think that meeting people through these sites has many advantages. First, it is really interesting to chat with people from different families, or even countries, on these sites. I can learn more difference between different cultures. Second, it is making friends on the sites that is really exciting for me. Sometimes I can know some famous people through the sites. Finally, I can also learn some new information from those people which makes me broaden my knowledge. To sum up, it is a good idea to meet people through online dating sites.

Expressing an Opinion--1

Using nuclear power to solve the energy crisis is a popular way in many countries. Although many people think that is a good idea, I strongly believe that there are many disadvantages of using nuclear power. First, it might pollute the environment around us, and some creatures might be extinct. We have only one earth, so we have to do our beat to protect it. Second, nuclear power is dangerous that might cause radiation leak if we use it carelessly. Once the radistion leaks, we might face many throny situation.  Finally, it is harmful to our health because it might result in pathological changes of our bodies. What's worse, it might take people's lives away. According to these reasons above, I don’t agree to use nuclear power to solve the energy crisis.

Comparing--2--revised

There were many similar parts of John Adams and Thomas Jefferson's lives. They both played an important role in American Revolution. John Adams was the delegate to the Continental Congress, and so was Thomas Jefferson. Besides, both of them were the signers of Declaration of Independence. And, they also studied and practiced law. Moreover, they were presidents of United States once before. Exactly, they died on the same day on July 4, 1826. It was really sad that we lost two important persons in this world within a day.

Comparing--1--revised

There are many identical points which are found on their licenses between Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friedman. They have the same eye colors which are brown. And they also have beautiful black hair. Brooks is the same age as Friedman. Furthermore, their birthdays were on July 31th, 1981. Besides, Brooks is as tall as Friedman, and both of them are 5' 3". It is really uncommon that two people have so many parallel parts.

Contrasting--2

I am the principal of this school and now I am going to hire a new instructor for my school. There are two resumes from Lynn Whitnall and Debra Fines who are applying for the job, so I have to compare them and make a decision. First, Debra has  more education than Lynn. Although Debra has more employment experience than Lynn, Lynn masters more languages than Debra. In addition, Lynn has won a award while Debra doesn't. Also, Debra has published a book in 2006. After considering, I decide to hire Lynn Whitnall who I think is more suitable for this position.

Contrasting--1

I am a freshman in the college, so I have to find a house where I can live comfortably on my own. Now, I have found two houses which might be suitable for me, but I have to make a decision. One of them is in Fairfax which has two large bedrooms, and the other one is CAMPUS APRTS which has only one bedroom. The first one provides air conditioner, while the second one is near campus. And the first one is furnished, but the second one isn't. Though the first one offers more equipments than the second one, its price is higher. Also, I have a pet dog, Gigi, so, I think I would choose the CAMPUS APTS which is more suitable for me.

Comparing--3

They are two similar teachers I know in our school. One is Lily, and the other one is Vicky. Both of them teach English, and they are both working hard. They have the same constellation, Sagittarius, so they have similar personalities. Both of them like to help those who are in need. Also, they are graceful and kind to everyone. It's really uncommon to see that two persons from different families are so similar.

Giving reasons--revised

There are a great variety of holidays within a year. Among them, Chinese New Year is my favorite. First, I can have a big dinner with my family and we usually feel happy and laugh a lot when we share something interesting happened around us. Also, we children can get red envelopes with much money inside from our parents and grandparents. I often save these money in the bank to prevent a rainy day. Finally, we always go on a trip during this long holiday and have a lot of fun. After the trip, I often feel that I am full of energy to face the challenges in the next year. Chinese New Year always brings me a perfect memory.

Describing a person--revised

Excuse me. I'd like to find a person. We are the tourists from Taiwan, and one of my friends, Fabian, gets lost. He is a tall and thin boy with big eyes and straight short blond hair. He is about one hundred and seventy-five centimeters. He wears a blue shirt and jeans, and he also wears glasses. We were separated at the MRT station in Tokyo. If you see this boy, please call me instantly. My phone number is 0911111111. Thank you very much.

Comparing-2

    There were many similar parts of John Adams and Thomas Jefferson's lives. They both played important roles in American Revolution. John Adams was the delegate to the Continental Congress, and so was Thomas Jefferson. Besides, both of them were the singers of Declaration of Independence. And, they also studied and practiced law. Moreover, they were presidents of United States once before. Exactly, they died on the same day on July 4, 1826. It was really sad that we lost two important person in this world within a day.

Comparing-1

There are many identical points which are found on their licenses between Stephanie Brooks and Ann Friendman. They have the same eye color which are brown. And they also have black hair which is very beautiful. Brooks is the same age as Friendman. Furthermore, their birthdays are on July 31th, 1981. Besides, Brooks is as tall as Friendman, and both of them are 5' 3". It is really uncommon that two persons have so many alike parts.

How to plan a party _Revised

It is very easy to plan a wonderful party for your friends. First, you have to check the guest list and then contact friends whom you would like to invite to make sure that who will be able to attend this activity. Second, make sure where you can hold the party and start to make a list that record what you should buy, such as, dessert, juice, wine, and so on. After you have made sure that everything is done, you can send inviting cards to all of your friends whom you want to invite. Following these tips, you will have a good time with your friends in your party.

Giving reasons

There are a great variety of holidays within a year. Among them, Chinese New Year is my favorite. It is because I can have a big dinner with my family and we uaually feel happy and laugh a lot when we share some interesting things happened around us. Also, we children can get red envolopes with much money inside from our parents and grandparents. I often save these money in the bank to prevent a rainy day. Besides, we always go on a trip during this long holiday and have a lot of fun. After the trip, I often feel that I am full of energy to face the challenges in the next year. Chinese New Year always makes perfect memory for me.

Describing person

Excuse me. I'd like to find a person. We are the tourist from Taiwan, and one of my friend, Fabian, gets lost. He is a tall and thin boy with big eyes and straight short blond hair. We were separated at the MRT station in Tokyo. If you see this boy please call me instantly. My phone number is 0911111111. Thank you very much.

How to plan a party

It is very easy to plan a wonderful party for your friends. First, you have to check the guest list and then contact friends whom you would like to invite to make sure that who will be able to attend this activity. Second, make sure where you can hold the party and start to make a list that record what you should buy, such as, dessert, juice, wine, and so on. After you have made sure everything, you can send a inviting card to all of your friends who you wants to invite. Following thses tips, you will have a good time with your friends in your party.

Explaining a Process-3

If you want to get to the U.S. Mint from the First Bank of the United States, follow these directions. First, go north  two blocks on the Fourth Street from the First Bank of the United States, and then turn left on the Arch Street. Then you can find the U.S. Mint is on your right side. It is on the corner of  the Arch Street  and the Fourth Street. It is easy to find and you can't miss it.

Explaining a Process-2

You can show that black is a better collector of solar energy than white by doing a easy experiment. All you have to prepare is two tin cans, black and white paint, and room thermometer. First, you have to paint the cans with white and black paint, and then fill the cans with water. After that, you have to put the cans in direct sunlight for three hours. At last, check the temperature of the water in the black and white cans and compare them. You will find that the temperature of the water in the black can is higher. And you can prove that black collects solar energy more than white.

Explaining a Process-1

It is easy to pot a plant if you follow the right procedure. First, you have to cover the bottom of the pot with some small stones, and then put two inches of soil on top of rocks. After that , you have to make a hole in center of the soil so that you can drop the plant into soil. After you add soil until it almost reaches top of the pot, you have to press soil down with thumbs. Remember to water the plant at last. By following these steps, you may pot a beautiful plant.

A horrible experience_revised

It was the most horrible experience that I had ever had. Last month, when I was on my way home after school, I found that someone was following me. At the beginning, I did not care about it, but when I started to run, he ran after me and caught me at the arm. I was scared so I began to scream as loud as I could. And I also dialed to the police station secretly at the same time. Unfortunately, the man found that and he was so angry that he tried to tie me up but I struggled intensely. Suddenly, the police car arrived, and the man was caught by the police. After this event, I became more carefully and prepared a whistle with me when I had to go home alone.

A horrible experience

It was the most horrible experience that I had ever had. Last month, when I was on my way home after school, I found that someone was following me. At the beginning, I did not care about it, but when I started to run, he ran after me and caught me at the arm. I was scared so I began to scream as loud as I could. And I also dialed to the police station secretly at the same time. Unfortunately, the man found that and he was so angry that he tried to tie me up but I struggled intensely. Suddenly, the police car arrived, and the man was caught by the police. After this event, I became more carefully and prepared a whistle with me when I had to go home alone.

My favorite movie-revised 1

  I like to watch movies, and one of my favorites is Twilight. It is a story about vampire's love. A  human girl fell in love with a vampire who had lived in the world for one hundred and nine years but still had a young handsome face. It was not allowed to have a love affair between a human and a vampire because they had to prevent human from knowing the existence of vampires. Unfortunately, the human girl was pregnant at this time, and she wanted to give birth to her baby who was half human and half vampire. However, the baby was too strong for the girl to endure the pain. When the baby was born, the girl almost died, so the vampire bit her and made her become a vampire like him so that they could be together forever. It is the most romantic movie that I have ever seen.

My favorite movie

  I like to watch movies, and one of my favorites is Twilight. It is a story about vampire's love. A  human girl fell in love with a vampire who had lived in the world for one hundred and nine years but still had a young handsome face. It was not allowed to have a love affair between a human and a vampire because they had to prevent human from knowing the existence of vampires. Unfortunately, the human girl was pregnant at this time, and she wanted to give birth to her baby who was half human and half vampire. However, the baby was too strong for the girl to endure the pain. When the baby was born, the girl almost died, so the vampire bit her and made her become a vampire like him so that they could be together forever. It is the most romantic movie that I have ever seen.