Discussing effects--2
A new factory in Action may bring some positive effects to this small town. First, it may offer more jobs to the residents. They can earn much more money. Second, it may cause economic prosperity to the town and lead Action to success. Third, this may bring many tourists in Action, and Action may become a famous site that everyone knows it. Because of these reasons, I consider that Action may have a wonderful future.
A new factory in Action
回覆刪除是Acton
你也打太少了吧!!!!!!再交代清楚一點會好一點~~~~
in Action ?XDDDD
回覆刪除是指在動作中之類的東西嗎(你滾)
應該沒有了
沒有吧:)
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lead Action to success...(笑)
A new factory in Action
回覆刪除裡的Action 是 Acton喔!
以上~
開頭的部分可以再多講一點
回覆刪除They can earn much more money.
回覆刪除提議在前面加上"Therefore"、"thus"之類。
Second,...cause economic prosperity to the town.
不確定要用"to"還是"of"。
Third, this may bring ... become a famous site that everyone knows it. "it"應刪去。
Because of these reasons, I consider that Action may have a wonderful future.
句末建議補述
"...future if the factory open."之類。
如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。
﹡may用很多次,建議可以換換其他的。
回覆刪除以上,淺見…
a famous site that everyone knows it應該是 that everyone knows哦
回覆刪除建議描述的更詳細會更好