2011年4月13日 星期三
Describing person
Excuse me. I'd like to find a person. We are the tourist from Taiwan, and one of my friend, Fabian, gets lost. He is a tall and thin boy with big eyes and straight short blond hair. We were separated at the MRT station in Tokyo. If you see this boy please call me instantly. My phone number is 0911111111. Thank you very much.
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We are the tourist from Taiwan.
回覆刪除＂tourist＂加上＂s＂。
我想，應該可以
多講一點衣著之類的，
可能比較清楚。
不好意思，只改這些。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
恩!
回覆刪除We are the tourist from Taiwan應該可以改成we are tourists from Taiwan
回覆刪除然後內容好像有點短...
We are the tourist from Taiwan,tourist要加s吧
回覆刪除one of my friend, Fabian, gets lost friend應該要加s 因為你朋友應該不只一個
If you see this boy 後面是不是該加個逗號
1.We are the tourist from Taiwan, and one of my friend, Fabian, gets lost.
回覆刪除→We were the tourists from Taiwan, and one of my friends, Fabian, got lost.
2.時態是不是要統一呢…?
個人認為全部用過去式比較好哦…
(以上，淺見…)
one of my friend, Fabian, gets lost.
回覆刪除friend要加s
我覺得描述有點少~= =
簡言之，人物描述部分太少了。
回覆刪除可以多描述衣服顏色還是身上的其他配件之類的...
感覺人的形象很不鮮明耶@@
回覆刪除跟我寫的一樣都是路人甲XD
回覆刪除就是會在茫茫人海中看不出來人物差別吧
其他沒有錯(笑