2011年3月9日 星期三

A horrible experience

It was the most horrible experience that I had ever had. Last month, when I was on my way home after school, I found that someone was following me. At the beginning, I did not care about it, but when I started to run, he ran after me and caught me at the arm. I was scared so I began to scream as loud as I could. And I also dialed to the police station secretly at the same time. Unfortunately, the man found that and he was so angry that he tried to tie me up but I struggled intensely. Suddenly, the police car arrived, and the man was caught by the police. After this event, I became more carefully and prepared a whistle with me when I had to go home alone.

8 則留言:

  1. I was scared so...as loud as I can.
    "can"是不是要改成"could"?

    請教一下,
    Vicky是不是有說過,
    像"caught my arm"這類句型,
    可以寫成"caught me +介+ the arm"。
    是嗎?


    --好強喔。邊反抗還可以邊偷偷報警‥‥‥。

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  2. 收到!!
    已修改
    p.s.因為我夠聰明呀!!
    XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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  3. 可以多描述當時的心情
    然後怎麼解除困難
    以後在遇到這種事的話可以怎麼辦 !!!!!!

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  4. 喔!可是....
    可以偷懶嗎.......

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  5. ...你動作還真迅速...
    為什麼可以一邊掙扎一邊報警阿?!
    有點點違反常識了吧?

    而且...
    不是要分成revised版嗎?
    你怎麼直接改...?!

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  6. 既然是最恐怖的經驗
    我覺得...
    要再將那恐怖的地方描述的更清楚
    像是那時的心情
    心裡是怎麼想的等等
    ^^

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  7. 哨子會不會只是配合學校規定?
    哈哈哈哈哈哈XD

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  8. 這是真實事件嗎?還是變態進階版?
    如果是真的那也太恐怖了。
    Suddenly, the police car arrived.這邊我覺得有點突然,可以多描述。
    以上。

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